The A-number-one kiss of death in a query:
“My grandchildren love this story!”
Or your children love your story. Or you classroom, your critique group, or–Saints Preserve us–
Never, never, ever, even if they pelt you with gummy bears and tickle you with ostrich feathers, mention anyone loving your work, unless it’s an editor who’s ready to buy it.
And I mean contract in Inbox.
Nothing labels you faster as a rank amateur.
Be professional. Offer your product and keep the emotion out of it.
Stay classy, SubIt Club.